Nicely done! I’d have to say that, between these two first chapters, I like this second version better. The pacing rolls at a good clip, and the introduction to the world and fantastic elements of it isn’t as jarring as the first one was—at least to me!😂 I’m no professional, though.
I’m actually glad to hear this, because I feel the same way!! I actually have a third version I’m working on too, and I may get you guys to weigh in on it as well. The opening chapters for these first books are SO HARD!! Thank you so much for your input!
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Nicely done! I’d have to say that, between these two first chapters, I like this second version better. The pacing rolls at a good clip, and the introduction to the world and fantastic elements of it isn’t as jarring as the first one was—at least to me!😂 I’m no professional, though.
I’m actually glad to hear this, because I feel the same way!! I actually have a third version I’m working on too, and I may get you guys to weigh in on it as well. The opening chapters for these first books are SO HARD!! Thank you so much for your input!